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May 2013
9:38pm, 10 May 2013
25,010 posts
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Nellers
Can we have an example, Pest?
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May 2013
9:54pm, 10 May 2013
5,466 posts
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Derby Tup
Wharfedale fell running
mist, curlew, lambs everywhere
tomato soup, cake
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May 2013
9:56pm, 10 May 2013
6,315 posts
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Oysterboy
Bloody soaked again
British summer is here
Tea in my onesie
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May 2013
10:01pm, 10 May 2013
5,467 posts
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Derby Tup
Kettlewell hill-reps
powering up, sprinting down
dippers on the Wharfe
1st effort is mine; this is Stef's 
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May 2013
11:19pm, 10 May 2013
25,011 posts
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Nellers
Criticism is
Hard to accept when winter
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May 2013
11:20pm, 10 May 2013
25,012 posts
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Nellers
Brings cold and dark nights
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May 2013
11:26pm, 10 May 2013
5,480 posts
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Chrisull
Haikus are deceptively simple, yet fucking hard to write, I love the challenge, haven't written one I'm happy with yet. While the 5-7-5 applies to the Japanese, but the Western version is accepted as subtly different, and the restriction in English language is often seen as unnecessary. Jack Kerouac wrote quite a few I like:
"No telegram today
only more leaves
fell."
and
"In my medicine cabinet
the winter fly
has died of old age"
and perhaps his defining one:
"Seventeen syllables?
No, as I say, American Pops:–
Simple 3-line poems”
In addition to Pesto's excellent summation, there's a couple of other elements a "cutting line" (also known as eye opener), which helps punctuate the whole rhythm (and ties up the two sections). In Japanese the cutting line is more important because Japanese haikus are often written on one line. There's also a thing about them being unpretentious, they are simple, and don't use long or fancy words. There's also often a hint of mortality in them.
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May 2013
11:31pm, 10 May 2013
3,182 posts
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sallykate
Lovely Friday run
Spring breeze made it slightly hard
Felt good afterwards
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May 2013
11:32pm, 10 May 2013
5,469 posts
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Derby Tup
I had a real fascination with haiku a few years ago and the point you make about never writing one and being happy with it is spot on They are great fun and I used to find myself composing them when driving or in the shower. I had lines that I liked, haiku which I thought were good, but I could finish and scraps of paper everywhere with unfinished work on them
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May 2013
11:33pm, 10 May 2013
7,876 posts
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McGoohan
Japanese poetry:
Haikus often don't make sense
Colander hedgehog
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